Shikyo Odolwa(Finished, would a mod please review it? ^.^)

Basic Character Information:
Name:Shikyo Odlowa
Age:14
Gender:Male
Clan:Odolwa

Looks:


Personality:
Shikyo is a calm and collective person, his shyness being his most noticeable characteristic. He does not actively contribute in conversations, but rather is that person who kind of sits back smiling, letting only a laugh or two escape his lips. He does however blend in, and does not appear awkward wherever he is. In battle, he uses a tactical approach, though he he does so on the tip of his toes, with his weapons. He does not easily get angered, and is usually blissful or at the very least content.

Basic Clan Information
Name: Odolwa
History: The Odolwa clan go back later than the foundation of Sunagakure itself. They were originally a nomadic clan that traveled from place to place following food, water buffalo. They thus are very Earth element oriented. They remained a tribal clan for quite some time coming up to the creation of Kirigakure. Under the first Kazekage they were promised a part in the formation of nation of water. So the once Nomadic society settled down within the walls of a new village known as Sunagakure no sato.
However, as a result of not following their food source and settling down they became more dependent on Sunagakure itself and it's cultures had to be overhauled. The Odolwa clan, stubborn to keep their culture and traditions, continued with their normal rituals and as they became closer to the militaristic aspects of Sunagakure, began turning their rituals into jutsu and using them as signatures. This pool of jutsu continued to grow as it was passed down through generations and became an important part of the Odolwa's way of protecting their way culture. In the current day, it is possible to see the Odolwa members by their unique symbols, colors (Amber and Blue) and the tattoo's from their many unique rituals. Though neutral, the Odolwa remain a friendly and loyal part of the Sunagakure community.
Odolwa Shinobi were well known for their ability to survive and cope will in one on one situations. Before the graduation ritual of one on one combat was banned, nearly all Odolwa that were pitted against other Academy students and Genin were Victorious thanks to one of their secret jutsu. The specific jutsu was made forbidden by Third Hokage during the early days of his term, and has been eradicated from being passed from generation to generation. A version however, of that very jutsu is still taught, and also considered forbidden.
In common day, the oldest and highest rank Odolwa carry the burden of managing the teaching of the jutsu and leading the clan. A single branch of the Odolwa has been enlisted with documenting all of the Jutsu made sense their merge with Kirigakure and are treated like royalty with the highest respect in the clan. They never actually learn all of the jutsu, and are never allowed to become ninja. Finally, in the spirit of the samurai, apart of the original tattoo ritual equips each Odolwa with a seal to kill themselves, in the form of a jutsu. All shinobi are told about this seal, and instructed to activate it if captured to take the secrets of their tradition to the grave.
Kekkei Gekkei:
The Odolwa clan's Kekkei Genkai is very simple, however the way they go about using it is more complex. They can activate multiple seals at once with the same amount of chakra, making their uses very efficient.(Usually a seal requires chakra to be set and then chakra to be activated, with the seals tattoo'd to the skin, one must only apply chakra and blood to the seal) A less simple concept of 'Odolwa rituals' that allow for the use of Circle Area Seal techniques; Static Seals whose abilities effect all within their radius. Now for the more interesting part...
The Odolwa clan leaders are refered to as elders, and every new child born into the clan must under-go a ritual of Bonding Life. The baby is pricked and a sample of it's blood collected. The blood is then mixed with a natural ink that is used to tattoo the babies arms from wrist to neck, and then along their colar bone to their neck. The ink itself fades into the babies skin, where it's effects lay dormant until they become Genin. When they turn thirteen, the ritual of release is preformed, where these old tattoo's are reawakened. The user can then began using the Kekkei Genkai to their advantage from that point on, by making perminant summoning connections between ones tattoo and an object or animal. Three summons at Genin level, Five at Chunin, Seven at Jounin, at Ten at S-Rank (Once declared they are perminant to the character). The circle seals are also tattoo'd to the body and are activated through the process of the Clan's secret jutsu.
Shikyo's permanent Summons:
A Katana.
A large Summoning Scroll, filled with:
100 Kunai Attached to wires.
30 Shuriken
40 Senbon
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A white crystal kunai, given to him by a jounin after winning a sparing match. This kunai is chakra sensitive.


Chakra Cost:5 per summoned object, 20 per summoned animal. The rest of the techniques have their own costs.
Description:
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Special Effect:
Secret Clan Jutsu:



Name: Connection Seal Ritual (Saiken Kaibyaku no Jutsu)
Rank: C
cost: 20 (Kekkei Genkai lowers the cost)
Type: Fuuinjutsu
Element: N/A
Description: This Seal can only be successfully cast on a in-animate object. Via physical contact with ones palm to the surface of an object, one can 'brand' the object with an Odolwa seal. Like a fingerprint, each Odolwa seal's appearance differs. Once the Seal is set, it fades into the object, and is then unseen. The 'Ritual' is considered complete. One can then freely summon the object with some variation of summoning jutsu once. After that summon, the seal fades completely and must be re-applied be reapplied via touch before it is possible to summon again. If used on an object that originated from the opponent, it can only be summoned in this way for the remainder of the fight unless permission is granted from the opponent after the fight concludes. This way, no one object is permanently 'stolen'.

Area Effect Circle Seals- Each of the Following jutsu require that the user bring their palm to a tattoo, where chakra in the palm makes a copy of the seal code, and then pressing this chakra to a flat surface, thus activating the seal. All seals are circular and form a radius around the center point, which is in most cases the caster. These seals are static. In other words, once set, they stay in one place. The seal can be placed on any surface, even if the surface is water or not exactly even ground. The effect of the seal itself, unless otherwise stated, takes place within the radius of the seal. The seal is visible to all as a white circle, edged with symbols of the Odolwa that are unique to each individual member. In a battle situation, each Circle Seal can only be cast once in a battle, and can only be broken by a seal realease, those with 'Fuuinjutsu' specialty with a jutsu of the same rank or manually by the caster himself unless otherwise stated. Each circle seal can be overlapped with another. If at any time a circle seal it overlapped with another with conflicting effects, the higher ranked seal takes priority. If the seals rank are the same, then both conflicting effects are nullified.

Skill and Rank Information
Village:Konoha
Rank:Genin

Special Characteristics:
Special Effects:

Elements:Fire
Skills Specialties:Weaponry And Ninjutsu

Weapons:
2x Katana
1x Large scroll
Contain's the following:
25 Kunai (on wires)
5 Fuuma Shuriken (attached to wires)
50 Senbon(on wires)
20 Exploding tag-kunai(on wires)
5 tanto(on wires)
5 Short handled scythes (on wires)
2 katana(on wires)
5x small scrolls
s1:
100 Senbon
s2:
50 Shuriken
s3:
100 Exploding Tags
s4:
40 Kunai (On wires)
s5:
5 Rolls of Ninja wires, each one attached to a large kunai that has 3 exploding tags on it.
Ninja bag:
5 Kunai
5 shuriken
10 Senbon
5 Exploding tags

I suggest you take a looksie here >>

https://narutor.forummotion.com/rule-book-f1/jutsu-limitations-just-quantity-and-training-t421.htm

Jutsus
(Bunshin No Jutsu) - Clone Technique
Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:10
Damage Points:N/A
Description:A clone made of the user that can move but(cannot use any jutsu)This clone is merely an illusionary projection of the user.

(Bikoku Ninjutsu) - Shadow Stealth Technique
Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:10
Description:This jutsu lets the user follow the target covert by concealing the users presence.

(Henge no Jutsu) - Transformation Technique
Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra:10
Description: Henge no Jutsu is a Ninjutsu technique, which every ninja learns at the Ninja Academy. Henge allows the ninja to transform themselves into any person or object. This allows the ninja to move with stealth or to trick their opponents.

(Kawarimi no Jutsu) - Change of Body Stance Technique
Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:15
Description: Kawarimi no Jutsu is a basic Ninjutsu technique. When in danger the ninja will quickly substitute themselves with another nearby object. This can be a block of wood or even another person. This allows the ninja to quickly flee and hide while the original object takes the brunt of their opponents attack.

Name: Suimen Hokou no Waza - Act of Water Surface Walking
Rank: E
Type: N/A
Element: N/A
Cost: 5
Description: A variation on the Kinobori no Waza (Act of Tree Climbing), the art of water surface walking allows a ninja to walk on water as if it was a solid surface. Focusing an even amount of chakra out of the soles of their feet, they can balance themselves on the very surface of the water

Name: Kinobori no Waza - Act of Tree Climbing
Rank: E
Type: N/A
Cost: 5
Element: N/A
Description: Kinobori no Waza, the art of tree climbing serves a dual purpose. Taking part in Kinobori Shugyou (Tree Climbing Training) helps a ninja learn how to focus their chakra. It also teaches the ninja how to run up trees and walk on vertical walls. The training helps the ninja learn how to focus just the right amount of chakra to a particular part of their body. The amount needed to climb is small but it must be precise. The feet are regarded as the hardest location to master chakra focusing. So by gaining the art of this skill, the ninja will have any Jutsu available (theoretically) because they will be able to focus their chakra as needed

(Nawanuke No Jutsu) - Escape Skill
Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:5
Description:Using chakra the user can escape from being tied down(only works with non-chakra ropes).

(Kakuremino No Jutsu) - Magic Cloak Of Invisibility Technique
Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:10
Description:The user will pull out a cloak that is pre designed for their use.Then by using ninjutsu they make the cloth blend into the background(Konohamaru used this to follow Naruto in episode 2 and got caught because he was holding the cloak wrong).Skilled ninja can see through this jutsu(Rank c and above)

Name: Kai - Release
Rank: D
Type: Ninjutsu
Cost: 15
Element: N/A
Description: Kai is a Ninjutsu technique which allows the ninja to avoid the effects of a Genjutsu illusion. After forming the needed hand seals, the Genjutsu technique will not affect the ninja. The ninja can also use the technique on another individual who was unable to avoid the attack. After forming the needed hand seals, the ninja touches the one affected to end the affect of the spell.

(Kugutsu No Jutsu) - Puppetry Technique
Rank: D
Type:AttacK/Defense/Supplementary
Range:Short-Mid
Chakra Cost:20
Damage Points:N/A
Description:The user makes threads of chakra that are used to control puppets.
Note: Shikyo Does NOT USE THIS TECHNIQUE FOR PUPPETS
He only uses it to control his weapons when he does not have wire for string reeling.

(Kanashibari no Jutsu) - Temporary Body Paralysis Technique
Rank: D
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short-Mid
Chakra:25
Description: Kanashibari no Jutsu is an advanced Ninjutsu technique used to temporarily bind an individual or animal. With the person frozen in place, the ninja can either take the opportunity to attack or to retreat.

(Fukumi Hari) - Hidden Needles
Rank: D
Type:Attack
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:20
Description: The user is able to call forth needles into their mouth and then spit them at their opponent with great accuracy.

(Katon: Kasumi Enbu No Jutsu) - Fire Style: Mist Waltz
Rank:D
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra cost:30
Description: User spits out a huge mist of flammable gas the can be ignited by local fire or by a fire jutsu.

Fire Style: Ignition
Rank:D
Type:Attack
Range:Short-Mid
Chakra cost:20
Description: a very small fireball, about the size of a balloon or a ball

(Katon: Housenka No Jutsu) - Fire Style: Phoenix Flower Jutsu
Rank:C
Type:Attack
Range:Short-Mid
Chakra cost:50
Description: Small Muliti-Fire balls that spread out and converge on the opponent.This jutsu can have shuriken hidden in it for added damage.

(Katon: Ryuuka) - Fire Style: Dragon Fire
Rank:C
Type:Attack
Range:Short-(Long,depends on how far the wire is)
Chakra cost:45
Description: Used in conjunction with String Reeling to tie down opponent and blast them with fire.

Name: Ayatsuito no Jutsu - String Reeling Technique
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Cost: 45
Element: N/A
Description: A technique used when throwing shuriken and other weapons that have wire attached to them. The weapons are thrown towards the enemy and the strings are used to guide the weapons into the enemy, therefore when they try to dodge the weapons can be redirected. This is typically used to pin down the enemy by tying them up with the wire or effectively strapping them to nearby trees/rocks etc.

History and RP Sample
History:

Shikyo was born about 14 years from the current date. His mother died in child birth, and his father had died about 6 months before he was born. Shikyo was raised by his aunt and uncle, who coincidentaly were the sister and step brother of Nate Odolwa, the infamous S rank Akatsuki member. His aunt and uncle were the ones who provided him with nurturing and guidance in his early years, carring for him as if he was their own. At an early age, Shikyo was given ninja training by his aunt and uncle, though it was only basic chakra control, and some basic Weapon techniques. With weapons Shikyo found himself the most skilled, and carried this skill into the academy. About 3 weeks before he turned 13, Shikyo joined the Konoha Ninja Academy.

Shikyo entered the academy at age 12 under the guidance of his sensei, Ichibi-sensei. Ichibi himself was a weapons master, and helped Shikyo with the development of much of his skills in the weapons area. Shikyo did not make a huge amount of friends in teh academy, but in general got along with most. His shyness did prevent him from gaining popularity, but shikyo was content with this. During his time in the academy, Shikyo developed most of his skills and found difficulty only in the area of genjutsu. But even that he eventually had skill enough in to pass. In the Academy, he found that his affinity was for the fire element, after taking the basic chakra paper test. He also found that he had the greatest affinity for Ninjutsu, and primarily Weaponry. Shikyo took place in the exam to graduate from the academy, and passed on his first try, becoming a genin at the age of 14.

Shikyo has just become a genin, and is eargerly awaiting being placed on a team, and getting into battle.

Rp Sample:
Near scowled he had only a few minutes left of increased reflexes and speed. Near made a handseal and 3 shadow clones appeared, each clone holding an identical copy of Near's staff. Near ran forward and threw his staff into the air, making handseals. On the final handseal, Snake, a giant rock shot out underneath each clone. Near caught his staff. Each of the clones focused chakra in their hands and quickly drew the seal for the exploding tag on the rocks. After doing so, they jumped off and continued to rush the opponent. However, they did so at such a speed that they would not be hit by the explosion when it hit. The rocks shot at the opponent, and when they reached the spot where he would be, they exploded violently, sending shards of rock out in all directions, on top of the initial flaming explosion.

I Have only the allowed amount of jutsu...The rest are just available clan techniques..

clan jutsu count towards the limit.

Oh crap >.<

Alright, I fixed that, I'll finish the rest of it now.

This is finished, would a mod please check it?
(((I am rotti, I'm just on my akatsuki account)))

- I think it's okay, Approved.

Would a mod mind re-locking and moving this topic?

I'll let another mod look at your Jutsu, don't feel like it right now.

Ok first

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Basic Character Information:
Name:Shikyo Odlowa
Age:14
Gender:Male
Clan:Odolwa

Space that shit out, don't just make it all bunched together like that.

You have to describe what your character looks like, not just a picture.

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Height
Body Type: Is the character skinny, overweight, muscular? (don’t contradict your weight) Are they particularly pale or dark skinned/tanned?
Hair Color, style and length
Eye Color
Any Tattoos, Scars, birthmarks, Piercings or other distinguishing marks they may have.
The type and color(s) of clothing they regularly wear
Any non-mission, civilian clothing they wear (some people have different outfits for when they’re not on a mission – others are always in their mission attire.)
Any obvious weapons/weapon pouches, or other ninja accessories they have on them
Any other notable accessories they might have (i.e. Genma’s toothpick, Asuma’s cigarettes, Kabuto’s glasses, etc.)
Where they wear their headband.

Follow that to write your appearance, a picture is just a visual aid. Not the description.

Your personality is too short. Make it better nub!

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How sociable the character is or isn’t? Do they get along well with people or do people dread seeing them? Do they like having lots of friends, a small select group or do they prefer their own company? Are they quiet or talkative? Are they shy or outgoing? Interesting or boring? Or anywhere in the middle?
How do they react with members of the opposite gender? Is it any different from how they act around their own?
How do they react to authority – be it higher ranked ninjas or otherwise? Are they obedient? Rebellious? Somewhere in between? Do they simply not care?
Do they have any particular goals and aspirations? If so, what are they and why do they have them?
How do they feel about fighting and/or killing? Are they blood-happy? Do they have pacifist tendencies? Are they somewhere in-between? Do they simply accept it as ‘part of the job’?
How do they approach combat? Do they rush in heedless? Do they take a more tactical view of things? Do they prefer fighting up close or at range? Do they prefer to try and avoid fighting wherever possible and rely on others to do it for them?
Are there any things in particular that they enjoy doing? Or vice versa, are there thing that they can’t stand doing?
Do they have any phobias, limitations or other personality quirks that haven’t been touched on? Do they for example, have a stutter or speech impediment? Do they have any unconscious habits (such as, for example scratching their nose when they tell a lie)? etc.

Use that to help write your personality, please try and make a small paragraph for each section. >.o

Before I eat away at your clan history, was it formally approved?

Though I will point out the basic problems with it.

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History: The Odolwa clan go back later than the foundation of Sunagakure itself.

'Goes'

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So the once Nomadic society settled down within the walls of a new village known as Sunagakure no sato.

Lowercase,
capitalize

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However, as a result of not following their food source and settling down they became more dependent on Sunagakure itself and it's cultures had to be overhauled.

'Its'

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The Odolwa clan, stubborn to keep their culture and traditions, continued with their normal rituals and as they became closer to the militaristic aspects of Sunagakure, began turning their rituals into jutsu and using them as signatures.

Nothing wrong here besides your use of militaristic. I'm unsure how you're using it. Sunagakure's only militaristic properies are that their Shinobi think of the mission before themselves and friends. And they train their ninja to be more powerful than their actual rank. Though, this is fine and just letting ya know. If you want brutal military, look at Kirigakure.

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. In the current day, it is possible to see the Odolwa members by their unique symbols, colors (Amber and Blue) and the tattoo's from their many unique rituals.

tattoos

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Odolwa Shinobi were well known for their ability to survive and cope will in one on one situations. Before the graduation ritual of one on one combat was banned, nearly all Odolwa that were pitted against other Academy students and Genin were Victorious thanks to one of their secret jutsu.

Why does this sound like you're talking about the graduation exam for Kiri where they had to kill each other? Nonetheless, you seemed to word this oddly and it seems hard to understand.

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The specific jutsu was made forbidden by Third Hokage during the early days of his term, and has been eradicated from being passed from generation to generation. A version however, of that very jutsu is still taught, and also considered forbidden.

Third Hokage?!? Wtf, you're in Sunagakure no Sato, not Konohagakure no Sato. The Hokage has nothing to do with Suna besides maybe some papers for the Kazekage.

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(Usually a seal requires chakra to be set and then chakra to be activated, with the seals tattoo'd to the skin, one must only apply chakra and blood to the seal)

tattooed

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The Odolwa clan leaders are refered to as elders, and every new child born into the clan must under-go a ritual of Bonding Life

referred
and remove the comma after elders.

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The ink itself fades into the babies skin, where it's effects lay dormant until they become Genin.

its

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The user can then began using the Kekkei Genkai to their advantage from that point on, by making perminant summoning connections between ones tattoo and an object or animal. Three summons at Genin level, Five at Chunin, Seven at Jounin, at Ten at S-Rank (Once declared they are [/b]perminant[/b] to the character). The circle seals are also tattoo'd to the body and are activated through the process of the Clan's secret jutsu.

I honestly didn't read much of the Kekkei Genkai, but if you want permenant summons. Why not just get some freaking familiars?
Also three at Genin seems a bit much.

Permanent
Chuunin
Permanent
tattooed

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Skill and Rank Information
Village:Konoha
Rank:Genin

Special Characteristics:
Special Effects:

Elements:Fire
Skills Specialties:Weaponry And Ninjutsu

Space this stuff out.

I'll read the whole thing after you fix all of this. and I'll do your history later.

Hey Hriky guess what? It's already been approved. Mitsu just unlocked it so I could add a weapon.

You already told me in chat. Idc really. Like I said, why I should do mod work at midnight. >.<